Comments on: I’m So Post Modern Lyric Writing Masterclass Page 2

By: Rhona

Rhona — Wed, 24 Nov 2010 21:13:42 +0000

I’m so postmodern that I eat neon lights, sleep in a perspex capsule on a bed of broken gramophones. (They’re telling me you suck)

By: Justin

Justin — Sun, 31 Oct 2010 04:07:29 +0000

Will: good rhythm, the lyrics flow well. Perhaps I wanted to third line to be a twist, say, something unrelated to ajax…even though it’s an absurd image overall – it needs something else to make it truly memorable.

Justin: Great promise! The logic of the proposition didn’t make sense to me straight away. Okay, so you’re looking for snakes that are quite close…it’s almost there! Just needs some tweaking somehow.

Caley: I like the surrealist imagery here. And there’s some nice assonance in logo and pro. Perhaps needs some kind of witty argument or twist to boost the humour up.

By: Caley

Caley — Mon, 30 Aug 2010 09:43:20 +0000

I’m so post modern that I brought a mac book pro. Just to eat the logo in a yellow submarine.

By: Justin

Justin — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 10:53:46 +0000

I’m so post modern I reverse my binoculars, and go birdwatching for snakes.

By: will

will — Wed, 14 Apr 2010 11:07:17 +0000

I’m so post modern that i drank some ajax spray and wipe, now my stomach is burning, but at least im mould free.

By: Justin

Justin — Sun, 24 Jan 2010 10:42:34 +0000

Hola Lisa, keep writing. I don’t think these would make the cut. The start of the art class was promising, I wanted a better twist.

By: Lisa

Lisa — Sun, 05 Jul 2009 10:45:36 +0000

I’m so post modern that I took out my iron, and used it to make crinkles… in a geranium.

I’m so post modern that I started an art class, so when people turned up, I could tell them I’d died.

I’m so post modern that I tap dance at bus stops… in the nude.

By: Justin

Justin — Tue, 15 Apr 2008 11:26:00 +0000

Heya Simon,

Keep it up. I like the idea of freeing your breath at the beach.

By: Justin

Justin — Tue, 15 Apr 2008 11:25:42 +0000

Great stuff Jeremy, you’ve really excelled. You seem to have a good idea about the twist and the connections. I LOVE the outsourcing one. Very relevant and nice absurdity. The attention span is a great break out of character affair that an audience would dig.

By: Justin

Justin — Tue, 15 Apr 2008 11:23:24 +0000

Way to go Georgia, trying to create a new genre of post modern lyrics – you pioneer. How about Statica. It’s close to super-syntax in that it’s too long to fit into the metre, but has an extra unhinged element to it.

By: Justin

Justin — Tue, 15 Apr 2008 11:21:25 +0000

Thanks Elizabeth. These are fair standardinas. Keep up the good work!

By: Justin

Justin — Tue, 15 Apr 2008 11:20:39 +0000

I appreciate your desire to step outside the framework. It’s good to see you experimenting, as that is what this masterclass is all about.

By: Justin

Justin — Tue, 15 Apr 2008 11:19:02 +0000

Brilliant Lexxie! This is top rate. Gold star. Very clever. *Shows rest of class*

By: Justin

Justin — Tue, 15 Apr 2008 11:15:07 +0000

That sure is strange and wonderful Jaquica.

By: Justin

Justin — Tue, 15 Apr 2008 11:12:14 +0000

Hey Bad Babsy,
The wikipedia one has a lot of potential.