Comments on: I’m So Post Modern Lyric Writing Masterclass Page 1 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/ The e-labyrinth of the Melbourne based art-folk humourist Mon, 06 Sep 2010 13:49:26 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: will http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-249315 will Sat, 17 Apr 2010 12:25:13 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-249315 im so post modern i think justin should look at page 2 of the masterclass where i left my last comment. or ill post some here instead =] im so post modern i think justin should look at page 2 of the masterclass where i left my last comment.

or ill post some here instead =]

]]> By: Justin http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-43844 Justin Tue, 15 Apr 2008 11:44:39 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-43844 Hey Ink! That ones is very random and cool. Hey everyone - go over to page 2 cos this is full up! Thanks. Hey Ink! That ones is very random and cool.
Hey everyone – go over to page 2 cos this is full up! Thanks.

]]> By: simon http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-25516 simon Tue, 09 Oct 2007 13:58:38 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-25516 im so post modern i dug a fifty metre trench with a spoon and called it sarah im so post modern i dug a fifty metre trench with a spoon and called it sarah

]]> By: Ink http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-24028 Ink Thu, 06 Sep 2007 14:02:56 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-24028 I'm so post modern, I steal people's sideburns, staple them to biscuits and pass it off as my Dad. I’m so post modern, I steal people’s sideburns, staple them to biscuits and pass it off as my Dad.

]]> By: Nigel http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-11237 Nigel Fri, 18 May 2007 12:54:34 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-11237 My friend made this one "I'm so postmodern that I wear a pegleg and an eyepatch, actually it doesn't make me postmodern, only a pirate." My friend made this one

“I’m so postmodern that I wear a pegleg and an eyepatch, actually it doesn’t make me postmodern, only a pirate.”

]]> By: Justin http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-9799 Justin Wed, 25 Apr 2007 07:01:25 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-9799 Hey Joeb, The last one of these is probably the best one. As it creates some nice basic absurd logic. Like, why not just go to school in the first place? I must say, that a post modern lyric ISN’T just putting three random things together, which you have in a lot of these cases. Like dolphin/horse race/gas station. There needs to be something extra, be it a pun, or a juxtaposition or alliteration or some ironic poetic subverting to make it more than just three random things. Watch your word usage too – the one about wigs would never scan to the post modern music. Try saying your lines over the song to make sure they match the meter. Hey Joeb,
The last one of these is probably the best one. As it creates some nice basic absurd logic. Like, why not just go to school in the first place? I must say, that a post modern lyric ISN’T just putting three random things together, which you have in a lot of these cases. Like dolphin/horse race/gas station. There needs to be something extra, be it a pun, or a juxtaposition or alliteration or some ironic poetic subverting to make it more than just three random things. Watch your word usage too – the one about wigs would never scan to the post modern music. Try saying your lines over the song to make sure they match the meter.

]]> By: Justin http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-9798 Justin Wed, 25 Apr 2007 07:01:07 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-9798 Hey Leinad, nice one! We’re not seeing much Bookendian content so that’s a great attempt. Nice alternate rhyme with rat and mat, it sounds good – and a suitably random positioning there. Bordering on being just too random for random’s sake, but I’m buying it. Second one not quite there. Love the use of the word lozenge – falls away a bit after that. Wouldn’t use ‘use’ twice like that – and the random things are too similar to their counterparts. Hey Leinad, nice one! We’re not seeing much Bookendian content so that’s a great attempt. Nice alternate rhyme with rat and mat, it sounds good – and a suitably random positioning there. Bordering on being just too random for random’s sake, but I’m buying it.
Second one not quite there. Love the use of the word lozenge – falls away a bit after that. Wouldn’t use ‘use’ twice like that – and the random things are too similar to their counterparts.

]]> By: Justin http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-9797 Justin Wed, 25 Apr 2007 07:00:51 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-9797 Hey Bungdeetle. First two are my favourites. These are really surreal. Scavenging for clowns is unexpected, as is Latvian feelings. Clubbing at cafes is too similar to playing yahtzee in nightclubs perhaps – try to stray away from original lyrics. Bert newton’s my wife is a good ridiculous concept – but the shoes – not so much, perhaps as it genuinely isn’t something we can believe or imagine. Hey Bungdeetle. First two are my favourites. These are really surreal. Scavenging for clowns is unexpected, as is Latvian feelings. Clubbing at cafes is too similar to playing yahtzee in nightclubs perhaps – try to stray away from original lyrics. Bert newton’s my wife is a good ridiculous concept – but the shoes – not so much, perhaps as it genuinely isn’t something we can believe or imagine.

]]> By: Justin http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-9796 Justin Wed, 25 Apr 2007 07:00:32 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-9796 Hi Boggie. I like saying hello to the washing machine, but then it becomes too random for random’s sake. This may seem like a confusing rule – but there has to be something more happening that just x plus x with an x. Like tattoo of my pin number in hieroglyphics on my neighbours guide dog. Humour is created because of the thought that the blind guy with the dog would never be able to see the tattoo. And the thought of how did you tattoo that on the dog in the first place. And how did you work out the hieroglyphics? I dunno – there’s just more that the imagination can piece together, like, you’re painting a crazy scene, that the listener can think about for a little bit. Wheras a washing machine playing poker is imaginable, but then eating your pencil case – perhaps it’s all over too quickly – or maybe the toilet is playing poker and gets a royal flush? Lame gag but at least it connects things a little more. Hi Boggie. I like saying hello to the washing machine, but then it becomes too random for random’s sake. This may seem like a confusing rule – but there has to be something more happening that just x plus x with an x. Like tattoo of my pin number in hieroglyphics on my neighbours guide dog. Humour is created because of the thought that the blind guy with the dog would never be able to see the tattoo. And the thought of how did you tattoo that on the dog in the first place. And how did you work out the hieroglyphics? I dunno – there’s just more that the imagination can piece together, like, you’re painting a crazy scene, that the listener can think about for a little bit. Wheras a washing machine playing poker is imaginable, but then eating your pencil case – perhaps it’s all over too quickly – or maybe the toilet is playing poker and gets a royal flush? Lame gag but at least it connects things a little more.

]]> By: Justin http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2000/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/comment-page-3/#comment-9795 Justin Wed, 25 Apr 2007 07:00:01 +0000 http://www.bedroomphilosopher.com/2006/03/12/new-im-so-post-modern-lyric-workshop-new/#comment-9795 Hey Joel, I think I like the last one best. I like the abruptness syntaxically of powder plus powder is quite a funny word. These aren’t being ‘crazy’ enough to get over the line – helmets when clubbing isn’t weird enough – riding girls bikes downstairs, sure it’s random, but it needs to be totally nuts, like I wear helmets when crying? Buy unicorn bikes and stack mythically? Hey Joel, I think I like the last one best. I like the abruptness syntaxically of powder plus powder is quite a funny word. These aren’t being ‘crazy’ enough to get over the line – helmets when clubbing isn’t weird enough – riding girls bikes downstairs, sure it’s random, but it needs to be totally nuts, like I wear helmets when crying? Buy unicorn bikes and stack mythically?

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